Fall in Onalaska Wisconsin is something you would not want to miss. The air was crisp and the leaves were beginning to change. The leaves crunched under Betty’s feet as they strolled downtown. They were both spent after a full night of riveting at the aircraft factory.
“Hey Marge, I’m starving.”
“Yeah, what are you tellin me for, I only have thirty five cents,” Marge grumbled.
Betty knew she was saving to buy Uncle Henry’s 1935 Studebaker , but she could not resist asking her cousin out for breakfast.
“Aw come on Marge, I will treat this time,” Betty chirped.
Good work. I don't see any major problems. Just avoid using "you" statements. I love the setting!
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